Finished my first Character, critique needed

@williamatics The ones :)?

Dominik the design of your character is pretty interesting. The clothes seem well made. Did you use a special program or did you sculpt those? Unfortunately I don’t have a great eye for things like proportions and such. She seems good to me in that respect. The part that sticks out to me the most is her face. It seems a bit static. For example in the eye winking pose. I half expect there to see the upper cheek to raise slightly and the eye brow to compress down a little bit . Without that kind of facial definition it makes it feel a bit flat. But this is for games so that may be the style you are going for.  Cool stuff Dom. Keep at it!

@williamatics respectfully, Dominik asked for a critique on the character above not on his grammar. I’m sure there are screen writer forums that would appreciate your attention to grammatical detail. Here it’s about the art and it’s a disservice to leave such a comment and have no input on the topic at hand. Please keep that in mind.

It depends on what your goal is.

If your goal is to create a comic-like character, you’ve achieved that.
Doesn’t look too bad, especially not for your first character.

What I find a little bit weird about her facial structures is that there are barely any “extremities”.
The cheeks are flat, the nose is rather flat, her chin is flat, her lips are flat, her eyebrows are flat. Try to get some more variation in there to imply bones and muscle structure, like maybe inflate the cheeks a bit, or have her eyebrows come forth a little bit more to give the impression of a bonestructure, drag her lips a bit outwards.

That kind of stuff.

Other than that, looks good so far. Keep at it! 🙂

(You can google photos of people and observe shapes of their faces and whatnot, that should give you a better idea of what I mean.)

@projekt154 Dominik you did a good job I think. I also feel there’s something off with the face of your character, maybe her eyes are a little bit too far away from each other. Try to get them clother to the nose and see if it looks better ?

Otherwise I like the character style, quite simple and basic colors yet very effective result.

Also, but maybe you’re working on it as well, the weapons are lacking details in comparison to the character, and could have smoother edges so it better matches the overall style/mood of your character.

@projekt154 

There’s no right or wrong 🙂 It’s also personal preferences. To me the edges seem to sharp, she could cut herself by holding her weapons with bare hand. Small chamfers could help, it doesn’t need to have a big radius either.

On the image bellow I pinpointed some edges that I think are very sharp. Then again, it’s personal preference, don’t feel the urge to change you model just for my sake lol. I really like her equipment, you did a great job with their design!

The blade holder is also very jaggered (red dashes) and I think a smoother curve (orange dash) could look a bit nicer (plus it would match the curvature of the blade).