It looks to me like you didn’t commit to the forms as much as they required. Everything looks mushy and under-defined except for the lower eyelid which looks appropriately definitive. So you started in the right direction but didn’t quite finish the job.
In short I recommend you spend more time committing to and refining shapes. You’ve shown that you know how to do that with the lower eye lid. Now just apply that same attention to everything and I’ll bet the final looks a lot better! 👍
