Really good work @ericyec ,
The last one, the light screen right, maybe should be moved more behind the character, see how the light just catches the edge of the silhouette without casting light on the cheek and neck. The light on the other side should be a softer fill light just to remove harsh shadows. The darkening around the eyes is probably more makeup than shadow, the depth of the eye from the brow will also make a difference.
The second one, the fill light screen right, could be a little softer, there is still shadow across the face, yours is a little too bright.
Well done.
