I’m so impressed with your writing skills @dostovel! I couldn’t agree more with @ullreym. Such skills will at least benefit your CG work tremendously if you let it.
Overall I get a very clear picture of the spice vendor. You’ve done a great job fleshing out this version’s personality and motivations. If I’m honest though, there was a disconnect for me between this version of the vendor and the charming home he lives in and operates his business from. There’s a lot of emphasis on exploration and travel – in other words being away from home fulfills him the most. I wouldn’t expect a person like that to prioritize his home life or his home to such a charming degree.
<my-opinion> The voice-over narrator idea we discussed in discord pushes against this a little imo. If a narrator is going to reminisce so fondly over his home, I see more of a Hobbit-like posture in life: Home is where he’s happiest. He has “no use for adventures. Nasty, disturbing, and uncomfortable things. Make you late for dinner!” Of course he travels when he must, collecting spices for his inventory, but deep down such travel takes him from what (and who?) he loves most. His business makes him a well-traveled person but this fact has primarily served to grow his love of home. When on the road he’s motivated to get back home and passes the time reminiscing about Vadimspice Mercantile Homestead. </my-opinion>
Does that makes sense where I’m coming from?
